Ideas: B
Organization: A
Voice: A
Word Choice: A
Sentence Structure: A
Mechanics: A

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Overall, I thought this was a very successful essay. The only category in which the writer did not receive in A (in my opinion) was in the idea category. The voice was great, the organization was very good, but the idea wasn't new--- it wasn't fresh or complex. The lens was creative, as was the narrative at the beginning, but I didn't see this as a complex issue. There's no doubt it's an issue, but the writer doesn't exactly use any tension, which could have improved the essay.

Ideas: B
Organization: A
Word Choice: A
Voice: A
Sentence Structure: A-
Mechanics: A

I thought that this essay was designed very well and made a quality argument. However, it didn't seem to me like the example chosen to demonstrate gender differences was one that most of society could relate to, or was a very prevalent aspect of culture. It also seemed like some of the interpretations of the show were stretches. But I think the organization makes sense and besides the core ideas, everything is really good.

Ideas: A (her points are clearly thought out and not obvious to the normal viewer - she clearly dug deep to find them)
Organization: A (her ideas flow logically, first introducing herself and familiarizing the reader with her voice, then explaining her topic and arguing it, and finally providing a solution to the problem)
Word Choice: B+ (some of the sentences get a little bit wordy and confusing, so I think the writer could have done a better job with eliminating unnecessary words)
Voice: A- (her voice clearly shines through in her personal anecdotes, but in other parts of the essay it is lost)
Sentence Structure: B+ (the structures of the sentences are not always varied, and sometimes the sentences don't flow together, causing parts to sound a little choppy)
Mechanics: A (her citations seem correct)

Ideas: B
Organization: A-
Word Choice: A-
Voice: A
Sentence Structure: A-
Mechanics: A

I thought that this piece was very well written, but I don't think it completely delved into it's topic with enough depth/detail. The writer used the Lizzie McGuire series as a Lens but I wish she had used other lenses as well from earlier to compare/contrast. I also didn't agree with everything she said about the Lizzie McGuire show and thought she could back up some of her assertions. I did like how she researched and used statistics--I think the statistics made her piece a lot stronger.

Ideas: B I thought the ideas were good but the essay could have used a bit more evidence to back them up
Organization: A The organization was logical and it flowed well
Word Choice: A
Voice: A I thought the voice was really good and I got a really strong sense of who the writer was
Sentence Structure: A
Mechanics: A

Ideas: B
Organization: A
Word Choice: A-
Voice: A
Sentence Structure: A-
Mechanics: A

It was a very well written essay full of her personality. However, the topic is very mundane and she took a typical viewpoint on the issue without very compelling support. The use of "Lizzie McGuire" was not very relatable and she did not explain/analyze the show enough. Her statistics and data backed up her ideas more than the show did.

Ideas: B+ , she had a lot of good ideas backed by specific examples from the television show.
Organization:A- There was a good flow to the essay and her points were conveyed completely and thoughtfully by the end of the piece.
Word Choice: B+ didnt seem to harm or hurt the piece
voice: A Her voice was honest throughout the whole piece; you felt like you knew her by the end.
Sentence Structure: A-
Mechanics:A

Ideas: B+
She definitely had good ideas for her piece and had plenty of evidence, but I feel that at times the evidence didn't necessarily illuminate her thoughts the way she wanted and it might have come across as unclear to someone who didn't know the tv show well. Some of her final assertions seemed a bit unrealistic as well.
Organization: A-
She did a good job transitioning smoothly and organizing her examples and research and presenting it in a way that was logical for her points.
Word Choice: A-
I felt that it was a bit wordy in places, which occasionally got in the way of reading/understanding what she was saying, but overall not bad.
Voice: A
Her voice was very strong throughout the piece especially in the beginning. She established herself well in the beginning with the anecdote and maintained that personality all the way to the end.
Sentence Structure: A-
Some sentences were a bit long and easy to get lost in.
Mechanics: A
No noticeable errors.

Ideas: B+
Organization: A-
Word Choice: A-
Voice: A
Sentence Structure: A-
Mechanics: A

I think she analyzed the characters in Lizzie McGuire pretty well, though I somewhat disagree with a fee of the things she said about Ethan and Gordo. Her points were easy to follow and the overall organization was logical. The author's voice in some areas was particularly strong and by the end, I had a sense of her personality. Her personal experiences definitely helped make the piece more relatable and original. I wish she included a few more statistics from other sources yo back up her points.

Ideas: B I think that she described Lizzie McGuire a bit much, without all of the evidence logically providing enough support for her points, however her main point was overall clear
Organization: A the essay had a logical flow of events, and an intro that establishes the main idea and draws the reader in, in addition to paragraphs building well off of each other
Word Choice: A the word choice was complex and precise
Voice: A Her voice was strong because of the personal anecdote she provided
Sentence Structure: A her sentence structure seems varied overall, but the flow seemed a little bit choppy in a few places
Mechanics: A no noticeable errors